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The work network got taken down about an hour ago. With nothing else to do, I started work on the TTK:R chapter Summary. We're back live, now, so I'm posting this for safekeeping, and then work beckons muchly:

The Trail of the Dying, The Trail of the Dead (up to Ch 34) )
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I've cut Dean and Seamus' riff on the Dead Parrot sketch from TTK:Reloaded. It didn't really advance the plot (the scene was only there to confirm that Hermione had indeed found a charm to restrain the Threshers), and I just couldn't find a way to elegantly inform the reader that yes, Dean and Seamus knew that they were quoting.

See, this is one of the differences between TTK and some of the other fics I've read. Instead of simply re-enacting scenes from films/shows whatever, using the HP characters as placeholders for Buffy or Blackadder or Bond (awesome artful alliteration, agreed?), the Muggleborns know, and recognise the quotes, whereas the Purebloods don't (always) get it.

And at this point, yes, I hold my own hand up and say that willingly did I rip off the economics teacher from Ferris Bueller for Binns ("...anyone? Anyone?"), and used a LotR Gandalf quote* for Dumbledore at one (1) point in the original version of the fic. This plagiarism was part of the discomfort I felt with the fic's continued presence online, and Reloaded has these scenes changed/modified.

It is, of course, a great pity that Dean, 1995/1996, wouldn't (and couldn't) have seen Buffy, or Angel, or Firefly, or The Matrix. Because he'd have loved them.


* "And that is an encouraging thought, is it not?" - it pained me to have to remove that line: it fitted Dumbledore, and the moment, perfectly, but I couldn't, in all conscience, keep it in. Gah.
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I'm not normally a fan of Ginny, but sometimes she's good value (TTK: Ch 48):




"Percy! Percy!" Ginny's voice cut across the still air of the cold December morning.

Percy, in front, stopped and turned round, irritation etched across every feature of his face, "Yes? Miss... Weasley?" he asked, feigning only the barest of acquaintance with his sister.

Harry was desperate for his captors to turn around themselves, so that he could see Ginny (and Dean, Seamus... hell, everyone seemed to be there), but their hold remained resolute. He'd tried looking over his shoulder, but a not so gentle prod with the third hit-wizard's wand, stabbing him right at the top of his spine, told him that such aggressive moves were uncalled for.

"Don't you 'Miss Weasley' me, Percy, you miserable git," snarled Ginny, of whom Harry now felt insanely proud, "this is wrong and you know it!"

In his mind's eye, Harry had a distinct image of Dean physically restraining Ginny from leaping at Percy and clawing his eyes out with her bare hands.

Pity.




It was pouring in another of Hull's special summer cloudbursts this lunchtime. I'd let Mali out into the yard, where he'd taken up his lounging position on top of his kennel. Then the rain started falling, but rather than come back inside (the back door was open), he decided - shock! horror! - to actually use his kennel, and had curled up inside, out of the elements' reach. This is actually pretty unusual for the hound - the only use he generally makes of the kennel is to sunbathe on its roof.

One of the problems with the Shuffle, which I've mentioned before, is that it's possible to brush the control wheel and skip to the next track... this is a pain when you're listening to a 2hr podcast, for example, and have to fast forward through to the point you were at prior to the unplanned navigational jump. The player gives you snippets of audio to let you know where you are as it zips along the mp3, and it's quite a surreal experience, hearing these disconnected words from the studio discussion (This Week in Tech, a bit geeky, but a fun listen).
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I'm up to Chapter 42 of the edit, now. Just another 48 to go.

My, I, certainly, liked, my, commas, Back, In, The, Day, didn't, I?

It's quite a slow process - I've got the fic in a single .html file open in Firefox in one window, and the source file in vim (best text editor on the planet, bar none) in the other.

None of the story's changing - I have truncated a couple of scenes, and changed some of the dialogue. Trying, also, to get to grips with consistent capitalisation: Portkey, Apparate, House Points and so on.

Odd things strike me: I Sorted Seamus' little sister into Ravenclaw, but then have her hanging out in the Gryffindor Common Room... how come no-one mentioned that in their reviews (OK, there's like 50-odd chapters between mentions, but still...)?

I'd love to try and make Malfoy more in character (I think, of all the voicings, I'm furthest off with him, at least initially), but I just can't do that and still keep the plot the same. Same goes for some of the scenes - I thought about cutting the lakeside party for Hermione that the Twins throw, but you need that so that the betrayal bites harder later on.

It's amazing, to me, that the fic even remotely echoes its summary:

Well, we’re back after the GoF, and things have taken a turn for the darker. Sword fights, apocalyptic battles, new kinds of magic coming right at you! We’ve got love, betrayal, angst. Doing the right thing, doing the wrong thing, and doing it in style. A Muggle-style beach party by the lake, a Yule ball and the full Quidditch season! See Azkaban! See Fudge on a power trip! Debate where Snape’s loyalty really lies. See what really prompted Slytherin, Gryffindor, Ravenclaw and Hufflepuff to establish the school. This is dark - expect deaths, and a PG-13ish rating.

I wrote that hostage to fortune (apocalyptic battles! Modest, much?) *points up* after uploading the prologue and the first three chapters - all I had was a vague idea about where things were going, and then I discovered that the characters didn't agree at all with what I was asking them to do, and were intent on doing things their own way. Which was a large part of the fun.

The bad points? Apart from character death, wholesale-stylee, Harry ended up waaaaaaaaaay too powerful (even if it did all come at a cost), which had never really been the intention. I'd much rather the fic had been more Harry/Parvati than Harry/Cho... way too many skeletons (sorry Cedric) in the latter. OTOH, the Harry-Parvati interaction through the middle of the fic I quite like (particularly when they're at Blackrock).
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Blech - am tired.

I'm trying to finish the edit of TTK - correcting the legions of typos and addressing the, uh, creative grammar, but I keep on finding myself reading on (despite having already read the thing, in full, just the other week).

In one sense, given that I wrote the thing, I s'pose it makes sense that I find it interesting to read. On the other hand, though, it does feel slightly narcissistic to read and re-read my own writing in such short order.

And, obviously, when I'm reading instead of proofing, it just delays actually reposting TTK:Reloaded somewhere.

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